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沧浪书院绝六班蘅皋组第十八讲作业 | 
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问好学友,小诗格律正确。意象偏虚,未写出同窗之意,结句期君/梦共斟遣词不达意,可酌 
 
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问好学友,承句挑为仄,孤平。苦兼忙可酌 
 
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章法严整且意蕴厚重。开篇以“德星”“玉章”破逐利之见,立师者高格;中幅“栽桃化雨”绘育人实绩,“蚁蝇争利”与“绛帐传灯”对比见坚守;末句“天道昭彰”收束,既含劝勉又显信念,全诗融典故于鲜活意象,骨力与  
 
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以浅语写深情,聚焦“学诗场景”见真味。前两句“聚雅堂”“琢华章”勾勒师生同研的暖景,后两句“光阴速”与“韵味长”对比,以时光易逝衬真知绵长,质朴中藏余韵,尽显学诗授业的温润意趣。  
 
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