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沧浪书院绝四期陆离组第二十二讲作业贴 | 
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一幅恬淡景,一具淡泊心,结尾倒是卒章言志,为何不做明示呢?格律几处错误,韵字错误,恬淡不是散漫马虎啊 
 
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作业符合要求,整体结构紧凑,不错的一首小诗。 
 
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挺美的小诗,物象有代表性,虚词使用恰当,整体流畅。 
 
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问好诗友,绝句格式最好横着排。总体不错,起承转合自然,脉络清晰,主题突出。 
 
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