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额关青老师评阅:
1.秋 远景由虚入实,见别离意。2.天 起句洪大,结略微敷衍。 
 
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问好诗友,很棒的小令,两个都写的很贴切,用词恰当赞 
 
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小词意境凄美,画面感很强,颇有马致远《秋思》的模样,很棒!点赞! 
 
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