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问好同学!写的很好。秋天菊黄红枫颜色鲜艳,表达积极励志情怀!斜阳黄昏成分略显弱。不足之处敬请指正 
 
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问好学友,小诗写的很灵动,韵字最好注意阴阳动静。合句已经很好,组句可以更精练些,那样就会更完美更大气 
 
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