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古风学院绝句六期鸿雁组第七讲作业帖 | 
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小诗平仄无误,起句东风袅袅,满树阳光,承句前四后三不协调,转句因有阴霾春扫兴,合句未能抱紧转句作结。 
 
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间好同学,格律自检。小诗读来比较流畅,个别的需要注意一下,起拍的,早与初意重,结句,为君舒,也需再酌。 
 
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小诗平仄不对,语言欠佳。押萧韵勉强凑,建议多看基础知识 
 
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