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烟雨楼22期律诗班第六讲作业 谷风组 | 
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如雪逍遥老师点评:首联写鸿雁行动的时令;颔联写鸿雁夜晚行动。颈联写鸿雁夜间歇脚地点;尾联雁没能寄书来,主人公泪湿衣裳。诗脉连贯,语言含蓄。很好。  
 
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临风你好!本诗格律正确。主题鲜明。此诗写得很漂亮,中二联也很切主旨,八分句的两处徨不如两断肠更有诗意。 
 
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